Imagine just for a second,
The skies were deep and dark and blue,
The Clouds were floating soft and low,
The sun was setting just for you.
Imagine just for a second,
Time was precious, time was new,
stealing moments in the dark,
Catching candles to see it through.
Imagine just for a second,
In the deepest of the seas,
From a time to the tide,
There was a will to please.
Imagine just for a second,
That I could paint you with my eyes,
I could read you from afar,
I could separate your lies.
Imagine just for a second,
The truth was open, the truth was worn,
Laid bare for all to see,
Ofttimes tattered, sometimes torn.
Imagine just for a second,
Life was your working tool,
To shape and mould at will,
To lead that life to the full.
Now imagine just for one second more,
I can see you now – as you really are,
Can you tell me truly,
You are happy thus far?
Very fine poem…love the series of questions leading to the final lines.
Thanks for reading this one – I’m glad you enjoyed it π
Brilliant! I fell in love with the poem by the fourth line, and the last stanza just blew my mind.
Thank you! Such lovely comments about my poem. I’m so pleased you liked it π
this is really nice, although a couple of bits I didn’t quite ‘get’. ‘From a time to the tide’? Also felt the last stanza was halting in some way – I think ‘just for one second more’ disturbs the rhythm? But it has a lovely ring – very engaging. thanks for posting.
AliB
Thanks for all of your feedback – all of which I’ve taken on board π
Very elegant. I loved the lines, “Imagine for just one second that I could paint you with my eyes…” Sometimes one second is all it takes for the truth to settle in – whether good or not. I’m glad I found you through the Challenge! I love Scotland and writing and I’m looking forward to reading the rest of your works!
Elizabeth
Thanks Elizabeth. I’m really pleased you enjoyed my poem. Just had a quick peek at your blog page – I love your attitude to life. Very similar to my own. π
Lovely lines.
Thanks Irene. I’m so pleased you like my poem π
This poem imagined its way to my imagination, lovely.
Thanks Ina π
very beautiful imaginations, thanks for the delight.
π
Thanks! I’m so pleased you enjoyed my poem π
What a brilliant poem and I fell in love with it so easily
http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/09/05/the-milky-seas/
Thanks Ann – I’m so pleased that you took the time to both read and comment on my poem. I’m thrilled that you enjoyed it so much π
you got the talent here, profound entry.
π
What a lovely thing to say – thanks π
Lovely, surprising, very lyrical.
Thanks for taking the time to read my poem – I’m glad you liked it π
Wonderful! A very creative take on the prompt π
No prompt used on Seven Seconds but thank you – I’m glad you liked it π
incredible.
Hohoho,
What charming poetry you have posted here.
Invite you to share 1 to 3 poems with us, anything could fit the theme of object,
Cheers.
Hope to see you in.
Happy Writing..
xoxox
Thank you – not sure about the ‘hohoho’ part but thanks anyway π