Suddenly tomorrow is here,
And something is amiss –
The day is duly dampened,
Why did it end like this?
My thoughts are full of night,
As I fumble through the day,
Catching glimpses, snippets, flashes,
Watching images as they fray.
To unearth the hidden secrets,
Searching the why’s and wherefores,
Simple in its winding stream,
With no end of open flaws.
Leaping through time, and place and reason,
Troubled minds now unaware,
Plotting scenes that now escape me,
Stirring hopes I’d like to share.
Finding time for contemplation,
Looking to what has gone before,
Soaking the silence with a daydream,
Tempting me to want for more.
Dusk has settled slowly,
As the day draws to a close,
My eyes becoming heavy,
As I seek my dream – in doze.
Will you be there once again?
Can I look upon your face?
Shall we dance the whole night through,
In a dream I try to chase?
And in sleep I meet new faces,
Some I know, some yet to meet,
And a new tale is untangled,
Just as bitter, just as sweet.
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Thanks for following – much appreciated. I’m so glad you enjoyed this poem – I will check out your blog π
Very nice wrap up at the end. Gives it a good solid ending without actually writing ‘the end’.
Thanks for reading my poem – I’m so glad you enjoyed it π
sweet rhyming & rhythm pieceβ¦.the speaker’s day is quite fullβ¦in brooding rumination. a complex & unhappy situation depicted by a the mind of the speaker. definitely stirring the emotions, this one.
good job.
Thanks for reading my poem – I’m so glad you enjoyed it π
So nice to dream the dreams we’d wish to dream and not have ones we don’t. π
True! Thanks for reading my poems and for your lovely comments π
lovely piece
Thanks!
“And in sleep I meet new faces,
Some I know, some yet to meet”
I love these lines. I can relate to them entirely – people i have met in dream that i’m yet to meet.
Thanks for your lovely comments – I’m so glad you enjoyed my poem
This is a beautiful write. Very melodic, nice rhyming and some awesome lines. Very nice!
Thanks Charles – I’m glad you enjoyed this poem π
I like it! Has a surreal feel to it.
Rosie
Thanks Rosie – I’m glad you enjoyed this poem π
insightful words.
drams keep us live and being hopeful.
Thanks for reading my poem – I’m glad you enjoyed it π
Thank you for sharing your work with us. Happy rally!
You’re very welcome π
It is lovely writing. At times though, I felt the rhyme ,scheme had imposed the word choice enough for me to notice and I lost the mood. The rhythm is strong and like a metronome – I wonder how the mood of the poem would be enhanced if it there was a version in free verse.
Ah – a true critique of my poem and one I truly appreciate. Firstly thanks for reading my poem, I take on all you have said, although I’ve only ever written in free verse once ( which you can buy on Ether App here http://bit.ly/bpvC84 Caledonia Green) I’m sorry you lost the mood but I hope you enjoyed it anyway π thanks again
bittersweet tales all over again π¦ sad ending, and if that’s the case, ouch!!
happy rally!!!
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Thanks for reading π